Surprise story- Revision of "The Hotel-The Intrusion"

[JB57]

HI! I've posted the story I was teasing a while ago. It is a new version of the first story in "The Hotel" series, the one that has Pat vs. Marsha.

This story is a revision of my original rewrite. I added a lot more detail and some new elements.

Part I is now up on my board. Parts II and III are done and I will post them over the next week or so.

I hope people enjoy this. I really liked the original, liked my more detailed rewrite, but realized I could do a lot more with the story. This new version should not contradict and should only enhance the other three stories in the series. Consider it the definitve version.

JB

[herbert3000]

Interesting. I think I vaguely remember this one although I probably won't be able to tell what has changed. Will have a look at it anyway!

[JB57]

Interesting. I think I vaguely remember this one although I probably won't be able to tell what has changed. Will have a look at it anyway!

Not remembering it is even better - you can enjoy this one as if it is completely new! Let me know what you think.

JB

[UltimateZeroStar]

That's incredible! The Hotel is one of my favorites! I'm so curious about what has changed. Excited to read it!!